great job man you did very well hope your paper come out that way

It looks good but you need to finish that book keep reading.

  you sound really well prepared and i think your paper is going to be amazing.  i dont know what else to say b/c im horrible at critiques

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I LOVE YOUR TOPIC IT IS VERY APPEALING AND IT MAKES YOUR AUDIENCE WANT TO READ IT. I LOVE HOW YOUR COMPARING AND CONTRASTING TWO LIFESTYLES THAT ARE VERY CONTROVERSIAL AMONGST PEOPLE IN AMERICA AND IT IS A WAY TO SEE THE REAL VISION IN LIFE. I LOVE YOUR THESIS AND IT UNDULGES EVERY PERSON TO WANT TO READ THE REST OF YOUR PAPER.

I feel your thesis statement could have more detail into the points you are going to argue in the paper.... Also, I feel once get your thesis statement in order along with your sources, your paper will be good... Great presentation!!! Luv Ya Sexy Daddy

      In your paper are you going to include the ways of surviving, whether living on the land or living in a more civilized society?  You discussed in your thesis about how these people try to escape from reality and try to survive on simpler terms.  But how do these people attempt to survive?  Maybe that's something to include.

i liked your thesis a lot.  i feel your paper will be fine if you get your peer-reviewed sources.  alice is gonna take off if you don't have them.  i am interested in the topic that you are doing and i don't even like action, killing, plot stories.  i think you will be fine coming up with 8 pages of work just stay focused AND GET THOSE SOURCES...........

I enjoyed the presenation and it was well planned. I can easily the relation that you are trying to establish between the two topics you are tryiing to tie together. Just make sure that you expand on certain oints to make sure that you will have enough in the final paper.

this was really good! i don't really have too much to critique you on... just get more sources and be focused! your thesis is good! you sound well prepared... just elaborate more on the physical, emotional, and mental challenges or whatever that you are comparing between the two pieces.

   Your thesis was really good. It seems like you know exactly what you want to do, and that's where you're going with the paper. Good luck!

wef! good job man! u seem to be really interested in ur paper i bet its gonna be super awesome!!!!! ur thesis was concise an clear! way to go! lol....wow that sounds corny...

I think you have  chosen two good topics. They fit together well although they are very different. I think your thesis was good & good luck with the paper!

Enjoyed the presentation.  Nice concise thesis.  Need more sources!  Luck you could use JSTOR i tried to find stuff about mine on JSTOR and coudlnt' get anything.  Oh well! GL